WALT write a character description of a person we know very well.
We know we have achieved this when we …
- - have written about the person’s
physical appearance (the way they look).
- - have written about the person’s
behaviour (how they speak or act).
- - have written about how they
affect other people (what do they do to make you notice them).
- - have written about the person’s
environment and belongings.
- - used descriptive words to make
a picture in the mind of the reader
My Dad - By Andrei Pike
Dad has black curly hair and normally wears a green or red T-shirt. He doesn't wear glasses. His name is Alex. He's got burnt skin and has a black beard. He is really funny. He is good at being goalie in soccer. My dad takes me to lots of places. He is fun to be with.
Feedback:
You have tried hard to tell me what your Dad looks like and something about what he does. How tall is he? You could make a comparison with something so I can picture him in my mind.
Next Steps.
- Please remember when you write your draft to put a capital letter after using a full stop.
- Try to use some more of those powerful adjectives (describing words)
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